tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post2623886730135704479..comments2023-09-20T07:30:02.175-04:00Comments on David's Writing Blog: SF Drabble #392 "Rebellion"Agincourtdbhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-23786385007764040592012-08-05T22:59:22.432-04:002012-08-05T22:59:22.432-04:00I was afraid it would be too 'expositiony'...I was afraid it would be too 'expositiony'. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. :-)Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-17448899597813638972012-08-05T22:24:43.120-04:002012-08-05T22:24:43.120-04:00Wow! There's a lot packed into this drabble!Wow! There's a lot packed into this drabble!Cameronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05407917830307384493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-44339927984533411362012-08-04T00:46:51.986-04:002012-08-04T00:46:51.986-04:00Thank you! :-) I had it in my head that it was the...Thank you! :-) I had it in my head that it was the kids exhorting themselves to win, but you're right: it could be anything!Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-9838697913176690182012-08-04T00:39:07.634-04:002012-08-04T00:39:07.634-04:00"Not this time" sounds like anything cou..."Not this time" sounds like anything could happen. Sounds intriguing. Great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-57743118038058069332012-08-03T22:55:15.176-04:002012-08-03T22:55:15.176-04:00Thank you Carrie and NC Narrator for reading! :-)Thank you Carrie and NC Narrator for reading! :-)Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-74583116577554542272012-08-03T18:21:22.336-04:002012-08-03T18:21:22.336-04:00very intriguing game. Love that last line. It comp...very intriguing game. Love that last line. It completely sucks you into the story!Carriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-49178524972072394692012-08-03T13:34:58.066-04:002012-08-03T13:34:58.066-04:00The Vylid are sort of a middle-management species ...The Vylid are sort of a middle-management species in this oppressive interstellar corporate state I call 'The Association'. I tend to picture them as flightless avians, with a long skull and a sallow yellow coloring.Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-60185412236533067662012-08-03T13:26:48.915-04:002012-08-03T13:26:48.915-04:00Loved it! Hatchlings seem like things that can go...Loved it! Hatchlings seem like things that can go either way - evil or good. On the one hand, a hatchling might be some creepy bug sort of deal that only agrees not to eat you because you're useful. On the other hand, a hatchling might be a noble flying species that is a benevolent (if somewhat supercilious) guardian. So many options!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05112972195028944426noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-83535721509249263382012-08-03T11:47:24.352-04:002012-08-03T11:47:24.352-04:00Thank you very much Wisper and TMW :-)Thank you very much Wisper and TMW :-)Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-33207132973146839852012-08-03T11:20:46.493-04:002012-08-03T11:20:46.493-04:00I look forward to reading more about this particul...I look forward to reading more about this particular game of Packet. You built in quite a bit of tension and foreshadowing here. I like that!TMWHickmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11099277984216556857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-31275731327791323612012-08-03T11:15:39.496-04:002012-08-03T11:15:39.496-04:00This sounds sooo much like the opening paragraph t...This sounds sooo much like the opening paragraph to a much bigger story. I love the tension you've already created in the first 100 words!dontpanic2011https://www.blogger.com/profile/03748395349482914590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-48155629226910306642012-08-03T04:16:47.848-04:002012-08-03T04:16:47.848-04:00Thank you :-) The setting is one of two SF 'un...Thank you :-) The setting is one of two SF 'universes' I've been fleshing out to use in my writing. It's actually the one I've used least so far, and it's proving fun to play in.Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-75370843637207528002012-08-03T04:14:45.768-04:002012-08-03T04:14:45.768-04:00Very mysterious. Love the last line. Leaves you as...Very mysterious. Love the last line. Leaves you asking, "And....thennnn what?!" And love the setting!CG @ Paper Furyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14954615708675952085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-74952577867604585042012-08-03T03:59:04.285-04:002012-08-03T03:59:04.285-04:00Thank you so much! :-)Thank you so much! :-)Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-79599848094872851172012-08-03T03:55:06.458-04:002012-08-03T03:55:06.458-04:00Well of course the Vylid hatchlings are supposed t...Well of course the Vylid hatchlings are supposed to win. I got the memo. Who do these upstarts think they are anyway???<br /><br /><br />Very Robert Asprin. I'd seriously give this a gold medal. Very well done!Shelton Keys Dunninghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10551666631783476472noreply@blogger.com