tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post5473539473690392684..comments2023-09-20T07:30:02.175-04:00Comments on David's Writing Blog: Fantasy Drabble #310 "I'm Saving My Love For You"Agincourtdbhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-89070262403245569752013-03-27T16:52:24.899-04:002013-03-27T16:52:24.899-04:00Thank you for reading and commenting! :-)Thank you for reading and commenting! :-)Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-40486988191535829352013-03-27T15:22:41.035-04:002013-03-27T15:22:41.035-04:00I liked the repeated phrase, I think it gave this ...I liked the repeated phrase, I think it gave this short piece a nice flow of thought. I liked her request for her paramour to stay invisible too... very sensuous. Tara R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/02993625193184914299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-18239588085312940512013-03-26T15:59:19.696-04:002013-03-26T15:59:19.696-04:00Maybe, but I could use a visit with a Princess eve...Maybe, but I could use a visit with a Princess every now and again. :-)Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-5562494875005142632013-03-26T15:58:35.931-04:002013-03-26T15:58:35.931-04:00Yeah, that's style rather than necessity. ;-)Yeah, that's style rather than necessity. ;-)Agincourtdbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00727155620856112847noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-86993006463032870752013-03-26T14:13:06.399-04:002013-03-26T14:13:06.399-04:00a good use for invisibility :)
Small critique: I ...a good use for invisibility :)<br /><br />Small critique: I really don't think you need to repeat the "he needs no..." and "He has a spell..." You could easily lump the thoughts into one phrase, save the words :)Carriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03472645003197467754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4416356209872338069.post-11157232100082960912013-03-26T12:19:46.882-04:002013-03-26T12:19:46.882-04:00I'd have liked a boyfriend like that back in t...I'd have liked a boyfriend like that back in the day. <br />These days I'm old enough to have anyone in that I want. But I'd rather get my rest!Wanda Psychohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09398274683194725769noreply@blogger.com