Courtyard By Marriott

"So here's my question…" I waited for the redhead to turn, to see me, to process what I had said, for the decision to hear the rest to play across her face; all of which happened quickly. Which was a good sign: if they're slow on the uptake I usually abort. Not this time. "What would the perfect thing to say to you be, right now, to convince you to give me a shot?"

"Probably not that."

I smiled; it had been worth a try. Women appreciate honesty. Especially women in hotel bars at midnight.

"But it's probably good enough."

10 comments:

  1. One teensy little critique...I would use a different word other than "shot" in the third paragraph. It's such a short piece that using it twice stands out more.

    Otherwise, loved it. Great set up, and you bring the whole scene to life with a few words.

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  2. See, honesty does work sometimes.

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  3. Honesty is always better! well done.

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  4. At first, I thought she was the bartender, and he was asking for a shot of booze.

    On second thought, probably not that.

    Cheers!
    JzB

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    1. You don't have to go home, but you can't stay here. :-)

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  5. everyone looks good at closing time. :)

    nice 100

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